Waters Of Love ((Yea I Do All types of writing))

YuNG_ReMY

Alot of people seem ta' feel the need ta' wanna test the waters of love wen love's the type of thing that shouldn't be - tested

Cuz love's a gift from god so thats a slap in the face ta' him if you testin' and he can take it back - in a second

So if you feel ya in ya heart that someones probably "The One" thats god tellin' you " Consider This A Blessin' "

See god created that water from heaven so there aint no need ta' think that water's a lil' bit shark infested

Understand real love iz all about, more than physical things

U also gotta feel that - spiritual heat

that makes ya heart burn~ for more of that person u feelin'

wen they touchin' the right places - makin the perfect decisions

givin' you comfort wen u need it, and complaments that give u confidence

To help to smile and better yourself, alot of this iz common sense

See luv iz more than a word, and even more than a action

Love is simply a person who'll do things for your satisfaction

and yes, love goes through its ups and downs

you're gonna laugh like clowns and sumtimes your gonna frown-

But if you remember the good times - your never gonna drown

cuz if u start ta sink - love iz there ta hold you now

The waters of love are beautiful, pure and full of heart warmth

So think about who you're around that makes your heart warm

theYunGWuN · Posted: Mon Sep 03, 2007 8:19 am Post subject:

i liked the rhyme scheme on this.. it flowed real well,, this was alot nicer den the other piece.. it had a good metaphorical balance to it.. and ya vocab was decent.. i would suggest using maybe a different format for your drops.. but other than dat.. this was nice.. keep it up fam